The Almost Poem: A Dance with What Could Have Been #poetry

I meant to write a sonnetโ€”
fourteen lines, a steady beat,
but thenโ€”

the rhyme slipped sideways,
and I lost count at twelve.
Or was it fifteen?

I almost compared you to something grand,
a lighthouse, a comet, a whisper before dawnโ€”
but thenโ€”

the words wavered, teetering on the edge
of what they almost meant.

A metaphor tried to bloom,
rooted in meaning, reaching for truthโ€”
but thenโ€”

it curled back into itself,
a question mark disguised as a sentence,
a sentence that wanted to be more
but settled for almost.

And maybe thatโ€™s enough.


---

I almost made a promise,
etched in ink, carved in stoneโ€”
but thenโ€”

the ink blurred, the stone cracked,
and suddenly, the words
didnโ€™t sound like mine anymore.

I almost traced your name in the sand,
but the tide had other plans.
It smudged the letters,
half-drowned them in saltwater
before they could settle into permanence.

I almost said something beautiful,
something that would linger in your mind,
a phrase youโ€™d turn over at midnight,
holding it in the hollow of your palmโ€”
but thenโ€”

it unraveled, syllables dissolving like mist,
a thought unfinished,
a melody missing its final note.

I almost knew how this would end,
how to fold the moment into memory,
how to step away gracefullyโ€”
but thenโ€”

the ending never came.


---

I almost caught the dreamโ€”
held it lightly, let it breathe,
but thenโ€”

morning cracked open,
and it faded like a song
I couldnโ€™t hum back into existence.

I almost followed the map,
but the lines blurred,
the compass spun wild,
north became maybe,
east whispered nowhere.

I almost saw your face in the crowd,
a half-second of recognitionโ€”
but thenโ€”

it was only a stranger
who almost looked like you,
almost smiled like you,
almost mattered for a moment
before vanishing into the blur.

I almost stayed.
Almost reached for your hand.
Almost said, Letโ€™s try again.
But thenโ€”

I didnโ€™t.


---

I almost wrote the perfect poem,
one that captured everything,
that held the weight of all the words
left unsaid, all the moments
we almost had.

I almost gave it an ending,
wrapped it in a final line,
but thenโ€”

I left it open.
The Almost Poem: A Dance with What Could Have Been #poetry

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29 responses to “The Almost Poem: A Dance with What Could Have Been #poetry”

  1. Not all who wander are lost Avatar
    Not all who wander are lost

    Love this

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  2. brazannemuse Avatar

    Almost is just never quite enough, to be or mean something – unless itโ€™s poemโ€ฆ love it

    ๐Ÿ’žSuzanne

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  3. ben Alexander Avatar

    Jaideep, this poem breathes in the space between what is and what almost was. Its quiet unraveling lingers, open and unfinished in the best way.

    Much love,

    David

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    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      David, your words hold such a beautiful resonanceโ€”thank you for seeing the spaces between. I cherish the way youโ€™ve captured that feeling of lingering openness. Much love right back to you.

      โ€” Jaideep

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      1. ben Alexander Avatar

        ๐Ÿค— ๐Ÿค— ๐Ÿค—

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      2. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

        ๐Ÿค—๐Ÿ™

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  4. lesleyscoble Avatar

    BRILLIANT! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘ But thenโ€ฆ I never doubted it.

    I especially love these lines-

    โ€œit unraveled, syllables dissolving like mist,
    a thought unfinished,
    a melody missing its final note.โ€

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    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you so much! Your unwavering belief means the world to me. I’m especially glad those lines spoke to youโ€”they carry the heart of the piece. Appreciate your kind words!

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  5. Violet Lentz Avatar

    You almost did this perfectly. But then- that wouldn’t have been right either! Excellent verses.

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    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      I love the way you put thatโ€”perfection might have ruined it! Thank you for your kind words and for seeing the beauty in the almost.

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  6. murisopsis Avatar

    Jaideep this was a delight to read! The uneven refrain “But then…” is perfection and like a catch in the breath~

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    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you so much! I’m thrilled that the refrain resonated with youโ€”it truly is like a pause, a moment of hesitation. I appreciate your thoughtful reading!

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      1. murisopsis Avatar

        ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿค—

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  7. sgeoil Avatar

    Your poem had a very seesaw feel. I found myself always being on the the edge of hope, “but then

    morning cracked open,
    and it faded like a song
    I couldnโ€™t hum back into existence.”

    I loved this stanza.

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    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you! I love that you felt the seesaw motionโ€”it captures exactly what I hoped to convey. That stanza holds a special place for me too. I truly appreciate your thoughtful reading!

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      1. sgeoil Avatar

        My pleasure.

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  8. Nicole Horlings Avatar

    Fantastic, Jaideep!

    I liked what you did at the end of each section, starting with the line “And maybe thatโ€™s enough.” I fully expected the poem to end there, and it would have felt satisfying to me, except the poem seems to doubt this statement, and insists on continuing. Then, at the end of the next section, we have the line, “the ending never came.” The poem could have ended here, in limbo. Except the poem defies fate and insists on continuing, seemingly seeking out that ending. Next, “I didnโ€™t.” This line is so short and succinct, and bears much weight as its own stanza. The poem feels like it wants to stop, because after that moment of almost starting a relationship and then not, how can the story continue? But the poem does, as if through force of will. Then, finally, “I left it open.” This last section is noticeably shorter than the others, so, unlike the other sections, it feels like the poem should continue for a bit. Yet, it stops, although, not in spirit, perfectly contrasting the other sections.

    I quite enjoyed the reference to Edmund’s Spenser’s poem in the third stanza of the second section.

    I also want to point out some parts I liked during my initial reading:

    a question mark disguised as a sentence,
    a sentence that wanted to be more
    but settled for almost.

    the compass spun wild,
    north became maybe,
    east whispered nowhere.

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    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Wow, thank you for such a deep and thoughtful reading! I love how you traced the poemโ€™s resistance to closureโ€”it mirrors the very tension I was exploring. Your breakdown of the ending especially resonates, and Iโ€™m so glad you caught the Spenser reference!

      Your appreciation of those lines means a lot. I truly value the way you engaged with the poemโ€™s movement and its quiet defiance. Grateful for your insight!

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      1. Nicole Horlings Avatar

        Sometimes, the close reading and analytical training I had in university slips out in my responses, haha. I really appreciate a well structured poem where form and meaning intersect so well.

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  9. ben Alexander Avatar

    hi, Jaideep ๐Ÿ˜

    Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted for the very first time by our delightful Anupama, is now live:

    W3 Prompt #152: Weaโ€™ve Written Weekly

    Enjoyโฃ๏ธ

    Much love,
    David

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