Ashes #poetry

Ashes fell from the hush of the sun,
and I licked the sky clean with my breath.
You watched me blister into September,
your feet crunching my yesterday’s green.

My skin peeled like birch bark at the edges—
you whispered, wait,
but time had already sharpened its knives.
Fog kissed your lashes, made you blink slower.

I wore twilight like a wet scarf,
you pressed your palms to windows,
counting ghosts in the glass reflection.
We traded sweat for wool, heat for hush,

and the geese stitched goodbye across the ceiling.
You held out your hands like a bowl of frost.
I curled into the pocket of your coat.
Ashes.
Ashes #poetry

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8 responses to “Ashes #poetry”

  1. ben Alexander Avatar

    Jaideep, the way you pull me through time with fleeting moments and contrasts between heat and cold is striking.

    ~David

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  2. judeitakali Avatar

    Gorgeous poetry.

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  3. crazy4yarn2 Avatar
    crazy4yarn2

    Jaideep, my favorite line in a list of favorite lines is:

    and I licked the sky clean with my breath

    Beautiful writing!

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  4. murisopsis Avatar

    Jaideep these metaphors were magnificent! Excellent! Startling! And mostly just perfect!!!

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  5. sgeoil Avatar

    So many wonderful sensory images. I loved “licked the sky clean with my breath”

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  6. lesleyscoble Avatar

    Oh I so love this poem, Jaideep. 🥰

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  7. ben Alexander Avatar

    hi, Jaideep 😄

    Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted by our beloved Suzanne Brace, is now live:

    W3 Prompt #158: Wea’ve Written Weekly

    Enjoy❣️

    Much love,
    David

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  8. ben Alexander Avatar

    hi, Jaideep 😄

    Just wanna let you know that this week’s W3, hosted by li’l ol’ me, is now live:

    https://skepticskaddish.com/2025/05/14/w3-prompt-159-weave-written-weekly/

    Enjoy❣️

    Much love,
    David

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