The Weight of Words Unspoken

In the hospital room where silence grows thick as fog,
I watch my father's hands—
once steady as oak branches,
now trembling like autumn leaves
against the stark white sheet.

The antiseptic burns my nostrils,
sharp and clean as broken glass,
while machines hum their electric lullabies,
counting heartbeats like prayer beads
slipping through tired fingers.

His voice, once thunder rolling across summer fields,
now whispers thin as cigarette smoke,
each word a small bird
struggling to take flight
from the cage of his throat.

I taste the salt of almost-tears,
metallic and warm,
while fluorescent lights buzz overhead
like trapped wasps,
casting everything in surgical green.

The worn leather of his wedding ring
slides loose around his finger—
forty-three years of morning coffee,
of arguments over dinner,
of "I love you" breathed into darkness.

Outside, rain taps against windows
like impatient children,
and I realize all the conversations
we saved for later
are pooling at our feet,

heavy as storm clouds
that never learned to break.
The Weight of Words Unspoken

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40 responses to “The Weight of Words Unspoken”

  1. Kim Whysall-Hammond Avatar

    This is a truly marvellous poem – full of concrete imagery and observation. It is also full of love and affection.

    Thank you for sharing this with us. Would you like me to reblog it?

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you so much. Yes, please.

  2. Stine Writing and Miniatures Avatar

    Wow, this was heartachingly powerful!

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks, Christina

  3. crazy4yarn2 Avatar
    crazy4yarn2


    Your description of your father, the melancholy of a changed life and approach to death, is glorious. Thank you!

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you!

  4. poetisatinta Avatar

    I don’t know if I can describe this accurately Jaideep – but it is so beautifully painful thank you for sharing ❤️

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you.

  5. Sarah W Avatar

    I resonate with this . Beautifully penned 💗

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks.

  6. ben Alexander Avatar


    Jaideep, this whole piece holds so much tenderness and ache side by side.

    ~David

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks, David. 🤗

  7. tenzenmen Avatar

    A lovely write 👏

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you.

  8. sgeoil Avatar


    This is so very poignant. Your imagery captures the end of life so vividly.

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks.

      1. sgeoil Avatar

        You’re welcome.

  9. Sadje Avatar

    A beautiful and poignant poem Jaideep. The emotions are palpable and strike the reader’s heart with their genuineness.

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you!

      1. Sadje Avatar

        Most welcome

  10. Violet Lentz Avatar


    This is masterful in its emotion. What a brilliantly written piece.

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks.

  11. ben Alexander Avatar

    Hi, Jaideep! <3

    Mazal tov ~ Sadje is selecting you as our W3 Poet of the Week (PoW) this week!

    I’ve emailed you with next steps as usual. If you haven’t received my email, please email me directly at

    DVDBGMLNY at GMAIL dot COM

    Thanks,
    David

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you, David

      1. ben Alexander Avatar

        Hi, Jaideep!

        Please don’t forget to send me your W3 prompt guidelines by tonight.

        Thanks!

        Much love,

        David

  12. Sadje Avatar

    Congratulations Jaideep, I’ve chosen your poem as the best one this week. You are the poet of the week this week.

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you, Sadje.

      1. Sadje Avatar

        You’re most welcome

  13. brazannemuse Avatar

    This cuts deep,

    … all the conversations
    we saved for later
    are pooling …

    powerful 💞

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thank you!

  14. Matt Avatar


    very good writing about a very sad moment.

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks, Matt.

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  17. lesleyscoble Avatar

    Your poem is outstanding. 🌹👏

    1. PebbleGalaxy Avatar

      Thanks, Lesley.

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